Tuesday, December 30, 2008

guy on the bus [PROMPTuesday]


This is my entry in San Diego Momma's very cool weekly writing exercise. The photo is hers; the song below accompanies the picture & my story.
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Guy sits in the same seat every morning; he's already there when I get on at the Lovejoy stop, staring out the windows opposite the door. I call him Guy because I don't know his name - no one ever speaks to him, he makes no phone calls, never has a magazine with revealing subscription info - and also because he's pretty regular looking. I can't remember a time when Guy wasn't there, and I've been taking this bus across town for a year now.

Some days I watch him and wonder what he's thinking. He sits so still, staring out the windows. His expression rarely changes; once I saw him smirk but when I followed his gaze I couldn't tell why, and he had gone back to a plain stare by the time I looked at him again.

I don't know where Guy goes everyday because I get off before him, and he's never on the bus when I head home. Last fall, I tried to interact with him by asking if he had a pen I could borrow. He glanced at my hand on his arm before slowly turning his face toward mine, shaking his head. I wasn't sure if he was answering my query or telling me not to touch him.

Today, Guy came into my store. At first I couldn't figure out why he seemed so familiar. I walked over to offer assistance, smiling as if we were old friends. Guy looked at me blankly, shook his head. He picked up a copy of the free newspaper near the door and left.

12 comments:

OHN said...

Hi..I came over from Rebel and haven't had time to read very far back but if it is ok with you, I will be adding you to my readwhenigettime list.

As for the bus guy...hmmmm. Maybe mental illness? I would probably call in late one day and take the bus all the way to where he gets off...I am terminally nosey. :)

Danielle said...

Very cool. I enjoyed that and now I want to read more about Guy. Maybe one day soon I'll do a prompt as well...I shall add it as a resolution.

Shana said...

Writing prompts scare me. Maybe a cookie will help me settle back down.

Nice job : )

Cheri @ Blog This Mom! said...

Wow.

Excellent.

Shana: Try dark chocolate with peanut M&Ms. A handful does wonders for the soul.

San Diego Momma said...

So glad you did this Stephanie! Really loved reading it. You captured how I felt about this guy when I first saw him.

Your PROMPT rooked me in with its grand writing...I must read more.

Thx for bring a part of this Tuesday!

blognut said...

I like it!

Joanie said...

I'm so glad he didn't have a gun. Because honestly? That's where I thought you were going. Or maybe that's just what I think everytime I hear that "just sits quietly, pretty regular looking" phrase. I liked your way better.

Da Goddess
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katydidnot said...

perfect. but i hope he comes back to your store and buys something so we might know more.

g said...

I like this. I like the other character, too - you actually flesh this character out in an equally intriguing way. Funny, I took my guy off the bus, without even thinking of it.

JCK said...

This was very cool. I especially loved the end.

Texan Mama @ Who Put Me In Charge said...

awesome writing. You are a true talent.

Minnesota Matron said...

This is really very lovely. We're all so alone in our worlds, aren't we?

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